As a class and with Kumu Kaleo’s help we wrote a small information writing piece.  We decided and agreed that we would write about a classmate who had a birthday during the month of August.  We were given reminders as to how writing has different parts that include, an opening or introduction, a body that has some detail, and a conclusion or ending.  Given the “rules” we began to gather information by using a bubble map.  After we got sufficient amount of information about our topic (Kahili) we decided to write out some sentences by putting the information and details together.  Next, we decided on a clear and catchy introduction, and a conclusion to end our writing.

Here’s what we put together:

And our FINAL read this:

We are going to tell you about our classmate.

Kahili is a kind, smart and tall first grader who shows ho`ihi at Kamehameha Schools.  Kahili is a six year old boy who will soon be seven.  He plays sports like baseball and football.  Kahili has two brothers and one sister.  Their names are La`iku, Nakoa, and Auli`i. One day Kahili wants to enter the Olympics.

I hope you enjoyed learning about our classmate Kahili?

Readers, Parents, Keiki………  For First Grade, do you think that this is the kind of writing our keiki should know now?  Know midway through the year?  OR know by the time they are done with first grade?  Why?  If you were the kumu and needed to grade this writing sample, what would you give it? Not Met? Approaching? Met? OR EXCEEDS?  AND WHY?  I look forward to any and all comments and thoughts.

Have a great weekend my Kamehameha Papa 1!!!!!!!!!!

Love, Kumu Kaleo