PERFORMANCE TASK
“I can describe how King Kamehameha I was an alaka’i lawelawe with evidence from multiple sources.”
Servant leaders take action for the betterment of the lāhui. They know when to follow others, to empower others, or when to direct others. They fulfill their earned roles and responsibilities. After reading the four texts, you will submit an expository essay, describing how Kamehameha the Great understood how to be a great servant leader using evidence from multiple sources.
Use information to draw conclusions about how Kamehameha’s choices impacted his låhui.
G: Be able to compose an expository essay in MLA format and cite evidence from multiple sources
R: Student
A: Community
S: You were asked by a Charter School Rep to share your deep understanding of how Kamehameha the Great was a servant leader and be able to recognize that within your community
P: 5 paragraph expository essay
ANNOTATION
The idea is developed throughout the work.
- In the first sentence of the essay, the writer clearly states that “Kamehameha had many qualities of an alakaʻi lawelawe.”
- Within the introduction in the three sentences to follow, a general outline of the reasoning behind the statement is provided.
- The paragraphs to follow utilizes information to develop the idea that Kamehameha “had many responsibilities”, “knew how to empower, follow, and direct others”, and “did what he thought was best for the lāhui.”
To be advanced, more reasoning would be provided for “exceptional clarity.” For example: How does having more responsibilities make you a great leader? How does knowing how to empower, follow, and direct others demonstrate strong leadership?
Information is applied accurately to communicate new understanding.
- In Body Paragraph 1, information from Military Leaders: Kamehameha I was directly quoted. The Law of the Splintered Paddle was also referred to, though not directly quoted.
- Prior knowledge indicates that good kinds are responsible.
- New understanding is that “Kamehameha showed responsibility because he had a system of rules for the people to follow.” and “He took responsibility for his wrongdoings.”
- In Body Paragraph 2, information from Julie Stewart Williams, Kamehameha the Great and The Red Mouth Gun was referenced.
- Prior knowledge indicates that good leaders can both follow and direct others.
- New understanding is that Kamehamehaʻs willingness to listen to his advisors made him a good leader.
- In Body Paragraph 3, information from Military Leaders: Kamehameha I was directly quoted again.
- Prior knowledge: Good leaders do good by his/her people.
- New understanding is that uniting the islands, the people of Hawaiʻi helped the lāhui and thus made Kamehameha I a great leader.
To be advanced, the reasoning behind why/how the evidence supports the idea would be more specific.
Organizes ideas clearly
- Follows 5 paragraph essay format: Intro, 3 Body Paragraphs, Conclusion.
- Introductions outlines main points.
- Body Paragraphs support with additional research.
- Conclusion summarizes the main idea.
To be advanced: More transitional words and phrases could be utilized to lead from one idea to the next.
Demonstrates awareness of audience and purpose through appropriate use of tone and voice.
- Role: Student, Audience: Community, Purpose: Share an understanding of how Kamehameha the Great was a servant leader.
- Student shared his/her understanding in an informative tone.
- Using descriptors like “empower, direct others, better his lāhui, etc.” the student demonstrates an understanding of how to illustrate a good leader to others.
To be advanced: More specific diction could have been chosen more precisely for a more obvious tone.