Peggy Kono

This is a 3 with conditions.  Missing paragraph numbers and quotation marks and has mispellings and lack of capitalization, but a well stated topic sentence with supporting evidence.

My opinion that other countries might feel based on president Trump is that the US are unfair to the outsiders and some amreicans. E1: He spoke about potential agenda items for 2018 in broad terms. They included a call for $1.5 trillion in new infrastructure spending on things like roads or dams, as well as partnerships with states and private businesses. He touched only briefly on issues like health care that have been at the center of the Republican Party’s agenda for years. E2: Tackling the immigration debate, Trump repeated his pledge to offer apath to citizenship for 1.8 million immigrants who were brought to the U.S. as children — but only as part of a package. He would also require increased funding for border security, including a wall along the U.S.-Mexico border, and fixing the current immigration system. Some Republicans are wary of Trump’s plan. It’s unclear whether it could pass Congress. E3:Republicans led rounds of applause during the speech. For the opposing Democratic Party it was a more somber affair. Democrats provided brief applause for Trump as he walked in, but offered muted reactions throughout the speech. A cluster of about 20 Democrats stared sternly at the president, withholding applause.

This is a 3 with no conditions except needs to capitalize States.

I think that other countries think that the United states is not very friendly because in the text it says in p.2 it says,”Immigrants that have moved to the U.S. from other countries have often been criticized by Trump.”I also know this because in p.7 it says “Trump said he would allow “Dreamers” to stay in the U.S. if lawmakers voted to build a wall between the U.S. and Mexico.” Another piece of text evidence that proves my opinion is in p. and it says”He also noted the decision to remove the U.S. from an Asia-Pacific trade deal. “The era of economic surrender is totally over.” This is why I think that other countries think that the US is not so friendly.

This is a 2, because there was stronger evidence of unwelcoming than the last one chosen.

My opinion is other countries might think of the U.S. as unwelcoming. My first piece of evidence on paragraph #2, it says “Immigrants who have moved to the U.S. from other countries have often been criticized by trump.” My second piece of evidence is on paragraph #6, it says in the text” February 8 is the new deadline to find out whether “Dreamers” will be forced to leave.” My last piece of evidence from the text on paragraph #10 says, “He spoke about potential agenda items for 2018 in broad terms.” Trump is talking about the wall he is building. Obviously, in this text many people from other countries think America is unwelcoming and unwanted.

This is 1.  There is little or no evidence that the U.S. is a threat,  the evidence is that others are threatening the U.S.

I think that other countries opinion on the United States is that U.S. is a threat. My first piece of evidence is in p2 “Trump warned of evil forces seeking to harm the United States from the outside.” My second piece of evidence is in p4 ” Trump warned that North Korea would put the United States at risk with dangerous nuclear missiles.” The last piece of evidence in the text is in p7 “Trump said he would allow “Dreamers” to stay in the U.S. if lawmakers voted to build a wall between the U.S. and Mexico.” So in conclusion other countries might have the opinion that the U.S. is a threat.

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These were rated a 3 – It was a well stated lasting lesson, there was strong supporting evidence chosen, and it was explicitly quoted from the text, as well cited with correct paragraph numbers.  Correct grammar and spelling and punctuation.

The lasting lesson is that nonviolence is quite an effective way of protest without needing to hurting anyone. Evidence 1 Paragraph 1:”He stressed repeatedly that his followers should never try to injure or kill anyone. Instead, they should always rely on peaceful protest.” Evidence 2 Paragraph 10:”For Gandhi, resistance meant placing one’s own body in harm’s way. Nonviolent protesters had to accept the possibility of injury, imprisonment or even death. And that is what made nonviolence such a powerful political tool.” Evidence 3 Paragraph 13:In the U.S. in 1963, Americans watched with horror as Birmingham police set dogs upon African-Americans during a peaceful civil rights protest. Outrage at this bloody attack pushed President John F. Kennedy to take action. In time, this led to the Civil Rights Act of 1964.”

The lasting lessons that we can learn from studying this event is that violence should not be the initial approach. I presume that because in paragraph 1 it states “Gandhi strongly believed that those seeking independence for India should never turn to violence. He stressed repeatedly that his followers should never try to injure or kill anyone.” Further more in paragraph 9 it affirms “police rushed upon the advancing marchers and rained blows on their heads.… Not one of the marchers even raised an arm to fend off the blows.” Additionally in paragraph 16 it declares “The peaceful resistance the two pursued was very effective in exposing hard truths about injustices.” Within the information we have learned from this article like, Ghandiʻs thoughts on non-violence, what they did when met with violence, and the effect of non-violence, it proves that violence should not be the initial approach.

This was a 3 that could be better, because the lasting lesson was too broad.  The evidence was limited to peaceful PROTEST.

The lasting lesson that we can learn from studying this event is to always be peaceful in all aspects no matter what the situation may be. The first piece of textual evidence that I found is from paragraph 1, where the text states, “Gandhi strongly believed that those seeking independence for India should never turn to violence.” The second piece of evidence is from paragraph 5 where the author says, “All this translated into Gandhi’s peaceful expression of protest.”The final piece of text is from paragraph 11 where the text says, “King used similar methods of non-violent resistance in his struggle for equal rights for African-Americans.”

This was a 2 – The lasting lesson was hard to understand, and missing capitalization.  The evidence chosen was poor, and was not given in the correct format.

The lesson that I learned was that everyone should have the independence to rule themselves with the things they have been educated and that nonviolent protests are frequently met in the presence of violence. In paragraph 3, it says “Gandhi believed that all people – rich and poor, male and female – should have the freedom to rule themselves.” This means that people should rule over themselves to know and do what they think is pono. In p4 it says “It provided a religious framework for his strong belief in the values of simplicity, duty and nonviolence.” This means that people should do what they have been educated and dedicate it to your life. In paragraph 16, it also states that “The peaceful resistance the two pursued was very effective in exposing hard truths about injustices. It won broad support for the protesters and brought about real change.” This piece of evidence indicates that you should still try to bring peace when there is violent and nonviolent protests and protesters.